By Christopher B. Daly

As a public service, I went over the statement by James R. Clapper, the director of national intelligence, and made some suggested edits. I, for one, think it’s touching that Clapper wants to inform Americans about his activities, so I would like to help him with his writing skills.

Turns out, Clapper has a serious writing problem: he overuses the passive voice, thereby disconnecting acts from their actors. Maybe he should write more often.

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